9th+Grade+Computer+Apps

**Hi, my name is Noella ** **Siblings: 2- One sister and one Brother.**
 * Grade: 8th**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: December **
 * Career Goals: Idk yet! **
 * Favorite Band(s): Boys like girls **
 * Favorite Food: Pasta **
 * Favorite Munchies: Choclate chip cookies **
 * Favorite soft drink: peanut colatas **
 * Favorite Subject: Lanugage arys **
 * Pet Peeve: ADRii!!! [and the jonas brotherss!] **
 * Pets: None **

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One day there was a frog named Panic. He had a green body with one big spot on is left foot. Every one made fun of him because he was such a loser! So the next day he went to the doctor and got himself checked out. The doctor said that he was perfectly fine but has some form of loseroues, which is a sickness that you cannot cure. It’s something that you have to accomplish your self. He also said that there would be a chance that he will die in 20 days. When he came home, every one was staring at him and smiling. “I wonder what’s wrong,” he thought out loud. So he went to his house and looked in the mirror. He was 5 years younger then before and on his nose was a big purple spot. “WHAT IN THE WORLD!” He screamed. He put on some foggy cover up and went back outside. Every one was still starring at him but this time they were surprised. Panic didn’t even bother going back in side to see what was wrong because he could tell that is leg were turning red. He went back to the doctor and told him every thing that has happened. The doctor admitted the foggy ages will change every 3 minutes and how it was part of the sickness. “What do you mean?” He asks. Every thing that is happening to you happened to you when you were little, you just don’t remember it because your mind is in that time period. After every one found out that he had the loseroues disease, every one became friendlier and nicer to Panic, but Panic didn’t catch on that they were only being nice to him because he was going to die. However on the 18 day Panic ran away. He became very depressed that he was going to die. He went to a place with lots of water and plenty of food so he could enjoy himself for the next 2 days. The 20th day finally came and Panic was very scared. He just stayed in bed the whole day and tried to fall asleep so he could die in his sleep. When he woke up it was morning. He was still alive! So he went back home and every one greeted him in surprise. He thanked every one for there support and went back to the doctors. The doctor said, “It was just a test. It’s all in your head. You don’t have a loseroues disease and you’re not a loser. So don’t feel bad about yourself and ignore your dumb friends. You’re in control of yourself. Panic went home with a smile on his face and yelled, “IM NOT A LOSER!” Every one just ran inside with guilt and Panic said, “That’s right I’m not a loser and even if I was I would be prod of it.” Panic went inside and began to have a wonderful dream. The next day He went for a walk, and by now every one thought he was crazy. So every one just pointed and laughed, some fogs even called him names. So once again he went to the doctors office. On the way there he met a very nice frog. She was very pretty and wore pink nail polish. “Hello, Im Panic, what is your name?” he asked. “Oh my names shell but you can call me tonight.” She started to giggle. “Sounds like a plan. What’s your number?” She told him her number and they closed the conversation by saying good-bye. When he finally reached the doctor’s office Panic explained how he had another problem. The doctor told Panic to go back home and told him not to waste his time. He wind up dieing that night of the lustrous disease he once had. So apparently the doctor was right all along and since the doctor didn’t want to take to him, he couldn’t of worned him. THE END!

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? This plot is definatley original!! I mean who would think of a disease called loserous! The plot of the story was very good.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I think that the frog's problems were resolved but even though the doctor lied, it taught the frog a lesson. There was tension in the story because you didn't know if the frog would die or not.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? A frog can't talk, of course, but the dialogue made the frog realistic.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? At the end of the story there was a lesson and that is what made the story interesting.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think the story was good overall but there was some spelling and grammar errors. But good job Noella!!!! =)))